Friday Fictioneers is here and my tale is not one full of cheer. I hope you like it all the same and give thanks to the one who started this game.
“Did you hear what happened?” Jenner said.
“This weekend?” Ben set down his Thunder Grill menu.
“Yeah,” Jenner grimaced. “It was Mr. Stein—used to run the jewelry counter in the mall.”
“She’s still unconscious?” Ben asked.
“I don’t understand; he seemed like such a nice old guy,” Jenner said.
“You know what I heard?” Ben leaned forward.
“That his eyes went all black when he was choking her? Yeah.” Jenner glanced towards the empty jewelry counter and shuddered.
“It’s just crazy,” Ben looked back at his menu.
Neither noticed the wraith of black smoke float into Jenner’s left ear.
23 thoughts on “All That Glitters”
Great piece, leads right into the next story 🙂
Thank you! It was fun to write—not so fun for the characters!
Well, that was unexpected!
I always hope to surprise people! Glad it worked!
Where are Sam & Dean, darling? This was quick and spooky!
Did I tell you I started watching Supernatural or are you FINALLY reading my mind?
Don’t forget to pick up that thing in the registrar’s office today — I’m getting an image of papers — yes — papers with typewritten words on them — and then it all goes fuzzy. Wow, that’s mentally exhausting, darling. I think I’ve used up all my psychic powers for today.
It’s a trick! It must be a trick!
Another fabulous ghost story! So many spooky happenings at this station 🙂
Thank you! I guess even those that need to “travel on” have to go somewhere!
Wonderful story, mystery and intrigue created so well. You can’t help but feel a cold shiver by the end.
Thank you! There was just something spooky about the abandoned counter to me.
That was very effective! A great build-up and a very scary ending. Well done.
Those pesky smoke wraiths are so elusive. Now I’ll never be able to eat at the Thunder Grill, in fact, Union Station is off of the ‘go see’ list. Thanks.
Yeeks – great ending! Looks like Ben’s in trouble.
Ben is about to get…smoked.
Sorry, couldn’t help myself!
Dark and smoky and I wonder how long until Jenner’s eyes turn black as he chokes the life out of Ben. Ron
Maybe Ben will head home before that happens! Although if he orders dessert, he probably doesn’t stand a chance.
I guess where there’s smoke there’s strangulation. Spooky tale.
In this case–there certainly is!
i wonder if Ben realises the trouble he’s in? Great spooky tale, well done
Maybe he will before it’s too late!