Another Wednesday appears, another Friday Fictioneers. It may sound confusing, but please don’t fret, the days of the week haven’t changed just yet. With Rochelle at the helm of our little written ship, giving us 100 words to twist and flip, we write our little tales inspired by photos such as this–so carefully chosen we can’t possibly miss.
“It looks so peaceful,” Kal said regretfully.
The tall, lush grass was damp with the morning dew and it clung to their robes. The Master’s white beard trembled in the morning breeze as he regarded the clotted-cream clouds fiercely; one white eye seemed to pierce through the rolling mist. Ropy veins crawled like blue worms under the skin on the Master’s thin hands as he held them out over the valley. Kal watched the clouds move steadily, their underbellies beginning to darken.
“The cleansing,” the Master said quietly.
Kal turned his head, wishing there was another way.
Vers Les Etoiles 
I love this, but have a suggestion for tightening/strengthening your writing:
“The tall, lush grass, damp with the morning dew, clung to their robes. Master’s white beard…”
I don’t think we need, “Kal chanced a glance at the Master.”
Other than that, I REALLY liked this. Your descriptions are so vivid, and there’s a very clear sense of sadness over the impending doom – however temporary, however beneficial it will prove.
Thank you–you’re right! I tweaked that bit and some other parts. I often breeze through the “editing” on these because they’re so short, forgetting that every word counts even more.
Thanks for commenting and critiquing! Glad you liked it.
I just want to say that I find it so refreshing that critique is actually given and gracefully accepted between the authors. I’m glad I found you super neat-o guys n gals.
~Chris
Everybody’s pretty nice around here and I love feedback–even if it’s a critique! Glad you stopped by!
I love the detailed images I get from your writing. Great story
Thanks, Lewis! Glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by!
Great descriptive detail. It put me right there visually. You left a lot to the reader’s imagination in this story. Ron
This has a medieval feel to it but it also seems futuristic.
I agree with all the above comments. Wonderful descriptions and an open-ended story that worked well.
janet
Really powerful piece, Wanderer. Very solemn…
I look forward to reading more of your writing.
~Christopher
Thanks so much, Chris! I look forward to checking your site out.
You got me! Like running out of plastic bubble wrap … “Must have MOOOOORE!”
Great, Wand, great!
Thanks so much!!
Dear Wanderer,
Loved the vivid descriptions as well as the ominous ending that left us hanging in the balance.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle. Always a pleasure to be part of FF
i loved this. the descriptions… and “the cleansing” sounds incredibly frightening. great use of the prompt 🙂
Lots of turmoil beneath the smooth surface of those clouds. Lovely story!
Thanks so much!
Very chilling especially as the picture and their demeanors seem so serene. Nice work making short work of us! Lol.
Thank you so much! I saw those happy fluffy white clouds and thought….nah. Haha glad you liked it, thanks for reading!
I can see those veins in the Master’s hands. Creepy.
Thank you!
Great descriptions roll through this flash.
Thanks so much!
This was so powerful, of the kind that I would love to continue to read on with!
Thank you, Troy! Thanks for reading.
One of those stories that feels like just a snippet of a much larger story. And your precision creates such a detailed picture of the Master and the clouds. Great stuff!
Thanks so much—glad you liked it!
Completely captivation and loved the end! 😀
Oops. I meant captivating!
I know a Noah. He’s looking for an ark for me. I call where I live Mount Arrarat.
Haha—useful friend to have