It may be frowned upon to use preexisting characters in a Friday Fictioneers, but if you want to know more about our adventurers, feel free to check out The Ungrateful Dead, Stings, and Vegas is the Meanest Town.

photo by David Stewart

         Evie perched on the rusted metal skeletal remains of the sign, trying to see through the fog. Owen was several feet away, checking and re-checking his guns.
         “They’re not coming,” he said, running his hands over the painted handle of his machete.
         “They said they would be here,” Evie hugged her knees to her chest, glaring at the steely gray sky.
         The rumble of an engine broke the chilly silence as the little Cessna 206 dropped out of the clouds. She stood to wave, losing her balance. Owen’s hands caught her easily. She pulled away as the plane began to circle.

24 thoughts on “Flight

  1. Great job! Leaving me quite curious. What’s chasing them that they need guns and a machete? Zombie? Killer Clowns from Outer Space? They??? (Shoot the antennae!)
    Very fun, I like it. 🙂

  2. Dear Wanderer,

    Using an excerpt from a longer work is acceptable as long as it stands alone. With our growing list of writers, it’s tedious to have to link back to another piece to understand what’s going on. Good job. You succeeded.



    • Thank you, Rochelle! Usually my tidbits from Friday Fictioneers have a way of working themselves into my larger pieces, but this one was backwards. I’m glad it followed the rules 😉

  3. I think this scene certainly stands alone just fine… you set up suspense nicely here, with the armed group waiting, and we’ll have to see what happens with that circling plane…

  4. This is well written as always, darling, and since I”m familiar with the characters I already sympathize with them, so I’m not sure I’m able to give an objective critique (it also doesn’t help that I’m currently wearing my HANNAH SEARS FOR PRESIDENT t-shirt…. am I? Or is that a fabrication? Hmm…)
    Anyhow, the problem I always have with “serials” as flash fiction is that I know that the story goes on — and I want MORE MORE MORE, dammmit!
    However, I do think that this was well confined to the space allowed. More, please.

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