Another Flash Fiction Challenge from Chuck Wendig. In typical Chuck fashion, we had to write about a “Bad Dad.” Possible trigger warning for some. I’m blessed to have a father that is nothing like the one we were supposed to write about. This piece contains characters from Southern Summer Night .
Even with the pillow clamped tightly over his head to block out the sun and the neighbors arguing outside the thin metal walls, Beau still heard the roar of fury and what sounded like a full beer splattering down the living room wall. Rolling over, he squinted at the sunlight; the bent mini blinds had gaps like a rotting smile. He fumbled for his phone with sleep-numbed hands and checked the time. 7:45 am on Sunday. And the old man this gone already.
Beau pulled his pillow over his face again and tried to go back to sleep. The heat washed through the window and he flung the covers away and sat up with a sigh. He pulled on his jeans and the least wrinkled shirt he saw and had his boots and socks in his hand, his other fingers fumbling for the window catch. Before he could climb out the window, the furious sounds in the main room of the trailer became coherent.
“Beau! Where are you? You worthless—get your ass out here,” there was an ominous creak as Beau’s father’s bulk strained against his recliner.
Beau dropped his boots on the floor and reached for the wooden bat he kept by his bed, but the creaking stopped and the yelling started again. Beau thought about taking the bat with him, but left it leaning against the wall as he pulled on his boots and stuffed his phone and keys into his back pocket. He could be out the front door and in his truck by the time his dad stood up.
“What?” he said to the back of the balding head as he walked out into the narrow hallway. The scent of sweat and beer and stale smoke met his nose more strongly than usual. The old man must’ve actually gone out to the bar last night.
“Y’talk to me like that boy?” he slurred, craning his bull neck towards the sound of Beau’s voice.
“Yeah,” Beau said, not bothering to move into the his old man’s line of sight. “What? It’s 8 am.”
“Don’t give a damn what time it is,” he struggled to shift himself in the chair so that he could look at Beau.
Beau opened the fridge, letting the cool air wash over him as he grabbed the carton of orange juice, checked the date, and chugged from the bottle.
“You listenin’ to me, boy?” he asked, making the last word a curse.
“You ain’t sayin anything,” Beau muttered, wiping his mouth on the back of his hand.
“You come here, boy, you don’t talk to me like that,” the stained gray recliner groaned again.
“Can hear you just fine from here,” Beau leaned back against the fridge.
“If your mother was alive—”
“Don’t you talk about her,” Beau shot away from the kitchen; the spotted, stinking carpet sank in places where the floor sagged. “Don’t you ever talk about her.”
There was a wheezing laugh from the chair and his father swiveled to face him. His once-white wife-beater was stained with sweat, beer, and black grease; he hadn’t changed since his last shift at Kay’s Towing. Several days growth of wiry black and gray stubble coated his jowls and his eyes were blurred and bloodshot. He laughed again, missing the disgust that curled Beau’s lip.
“There’s some fire in you, boy,” he said, taking a long pull from the beer in his hand. “I wondered if you done got all her mouth and all her pretty looks and none of the man what got you.” He gave Beau a look that set his teeth on edge.
“I said, don’t talk about her,” Beau said, voice barely audible over the television.
“I’ll talk about who I want, when I want, boy,” his father leaned forward, sloshing more beer onto the filthy carpet. “I know the woman hid some money here somewhere, or gave it to you.”
“I don’t know anything—” Beau began.
“Don’t lie to me, boy! I know she left you somethin’, and you’re gonna give it to me,” his voice turned almost wheedling.
“I don’t have anything,” Beau said, looking him straight in the eye. “Any money she left, you spent on booze and pool and whores.”
The watery blue eyes widened before the overgrown brows settled down over them.
“You don’t talk to me like that you worthless, sonofabitch,” the beer can in his hand crumpled as his fist tightened. He didn’t even notice the beer running over his meaty fingers.
“I’ll talk however the hell I want, you sorry, useless excuse for a man,” Beau’s voice rose. “If I had any money from her, you think I’d still be here? You think I’d still live in this filthy hellhole with you? If I had my way you’dve drunk yourself to death the day I was born.”
Beau realized he was shaking and tried to stop the tremors that seemed to reach his very bones. His jaw ached from clenching his teeth and his ragged fingernails bit into his palms.
“What do you need the money for this time, you pathetic drunk?” Beau asked. “You lose another game of pool? You gamble on the wrong team again? What happens if you don’t pay, old man? Do they break your fingers? Beat you up a little?” Beau felt a smile twist his lips. “I’ll hold the door open for ’em.”
Beau had never seen the old man shocked into silence, his mouth slackened and his watery eyes, for once, held something other than anger. Beau turned away from that look and swung open the screen door, stepping out of the trailer and letting the door slam behind him, rattling. The engine of his truck came to life as the badly aimed beer can hit his tailgate with a ringing clang. His father swayed on the porch, face red from anger and exertion. Beau gave him one last glance in the mirror before he hit the accelerator.
“Happy father’s day, Pop,” he said.
8 thoughts on “Trailers and Tailgates”
Interesting take on the challenge! I find it interesting how everybody has different ideas on what we deem ‘bad’ parenting. I can definitely sympathise with Beau, though not so much the father. Regardless, you did a wonderful job (as always) of creating two very real, very believable, very *human* characters. I enjoy that they seem to have their flaws, but don’t seem at all repentant about them. Great job!
I sort of skipped out on the sympathetic part…I have a character arc in mind for both of them and his father really is a nasty S.O.B. although, he might be slightly redeemable later on. I’m glad you enjoyed it and that they were real—Beau is one of my first (successful) forays into a seriously flawed character. Thank your for reading and for the compliments!
I could almost feel the heat and tension and smell the sweat and booze. Well done.
Thank you (again)!
Yeah, me and Beau are off to pick up some Skoal and check out the NASCAR, darling. Make sure to keep the longnecks cold. (Swatting your derriere.)
You create detestable characters, darling, and I love it.
I think this may be the highest praise I’ve yet received. I hope to create more characters that inspire disgust and hatred in the future, since I finally learned that the good guys never actually have any fun.
Brilliant scene. It’s gritty, and descriptive without being cloyingly so.
Can I offer a piece of constructive criticism? The following: “He laughed again at the disgust that curled Beau’s lip.” carries a subtle POV shift. Just something to keep in mind if/when you revisit.
Again, this post was so captivating, I was completely prepared to read beyond the word limit. A very, very well done indeed!
Thank you so much!
And double thank you for the criticism—I have some trouble with POV hopping, I’ll see what I can do to fix that sentence.
Glad you enjoyed it and that you want to keep reading! I’m planning on Beau’s story to be novel length once I get back to him.